FatKidWitAJetPak's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Weirdest Link]

Horrible

The beginning of the song makes me want to throw up. Its monotonous, far to organic, and has terrible mixing. The song pretty much gets worse after that with that same poorly made beat along with toher kicks and high hats that make me want to shoot myself.

The trumpet in the middle is played poorly, with no sign of organization. The sounds combine together in a very poor manner. This is just a bad song all together, please work on your music a lot harder next time instead of cranking out 6 songs in a week. Dedicate a week to ONE song, and see where that gets you.

Cuzone responds:

I took your review seriously until I listened to your music.

[Drowning into the Heavens]

Mark

Drowning Into The Heavens

The white ripples dance over the glassy waves, washing over the sandy beach. Tiny holes fill with clear blue, and collapse underneath until the banks are solid once more. The sun against the painted sky casts a hue of violet across the peaceful body of water. Its illuminating glow hovers over the ocean, and lowers until it shows only a single ray of light throughout the waters. The clouds begin to disappear, absorbed by the night sky. Day is conquered by night, and all that is heard within its grasp is the single, silent sound of waves washing over rock and sand. The moon rises in the night sky, casting a new light on the world.

Under the twirling salt water of the Mariana Trench lies an entire different world. Creatures with gills swim in colonies, rubbery skin covering their tiny bodies. Blobs of blue and red float throughout this universe, carrying tiny strands that move to the beat of the current. Colossal beings gaze through the world, singing in pure joy. Pieces of green and yellow plants attach themselves down below, hiding and housing colorful bodies that feed on its nutrition. Strange species roam its depths, deeper into the darkness.

Down below, where no human may ever breath or see, lies a land unlike any other. Stars light the abyss, in a multi array of color and beauty. These beings posses the ability to produce such wonder, because the darkness is so overwhelming. Exotic, horrifying molds wonder into the unknown. Millions of teeth cover them. Electric shots of poison shoot from their mouths. Tiny globs of light attract the weak to their grasps. The more peaceful absorb defensive structure, to confuse and bewilder the strong. Transparent figures dance. Knots of muscle float. Chemicals produce twinkling lights.

Even deeper, past the pitch black world lies a figment of gods imagination. Over the end of the ocean, lies a castle. A castle made of pure glass and gold. Its streaks of blue cover every inch, to form an astronomical city. The structures spread wide and far, holding a group of figures known as the wise ones. These creatures run the universe. They create. They destroy. With their spears of light, darkness, and glass, they control. Walking giants with crab shaped bodies slowly tread over the land, searching for death. All they see is the castle, and nothing else. It seems abandoned, it seems dead. All that is seen is glass. All that is seen are the waves of diamond, covering the beaches of their world.

He wakes up. He notices, quickly, that everything around him is made of a strange, glassy material. His face reflects distortedly back at him. There is nothing inside of this room except a single mattress, and a pitch blue door. He looks again, thinking this might be a dream, but he sees the same wonder. He opens his mouth, but his cries for help make no sound. What is this place? He gets up from the cold mattress, and stumbles against the blue handle of the door. It turns, to his surprise, and opens in complete silence. There is no sound... there is no air. Yet I can see.

Outside his chamber lies an endless tunnel of glass. There are no windows. There are no people. There is just emptiness. A tear drops from his face, and melts onto the glassy floor below. He walks. His footsteps make no sound as he continues into the unknown. He walks still. Hours pass. He grown tired. He grows anxious. He runs. He sweats. He screams to no avail, already understanding that this silent hell is an endless abyss of solid, blue glass. He slips, and falls to the floor below. Pounding his fist against its surface, he beings crying. He lies there, staring straight up. Everything is the same, distorted blue. It goes on forever. He grows hungry. He grows thirsty. He grows old.

Everything begins growing black. He stops breathing, and he finally hears a sound. His heartbeat covers everything, and then stops. The world is quiet once again. And so the crab shaped giants carry him into the sky, and illuminate the moon that lights our peaceful world.

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Good job Mark :')

MarkySpark responds:

Good Job Nick!

[No Tomorrow's]

Flower

The sweet flower floats in the wind, carrying speckles of pollen against its stem. It twirls inside the airs grasp, and lands gently on a rock alongside a large hill. A shoe steps next to it, and a hand picks it from the cold stone. Its red and yellow petals touch her nose, and she smiles. She puts it inside her pocket, and continues walking through the quiet mountain. It is a cloudy day, the breeze feels nice against her skin. She moves the air around her, in a nature walk back home.

Inside the quiet house lies an old man, rusting in his rocking chair, coughing underneath his gray blanket. His narrow eyes peer at the door as it creaks open, leaking a small ray of light over him for an instant, then disappearing into the darkness once more.

He sees his granddaughter step forwards, and a lightbulb is screwed into a dusty lamp on an old table. The cobwebs scamper away as the lamp clicks, and light paints the dull room. She leans over to his cold body and drops a small flower into his lap, and pulls his covers towards his neck, kidding him on the forehead. With a soft whisper, she calms him.

The man looks upon the colorful Jacqueline flower, and a smile forms across his old face. The look in his eyes made the girl knew that he could die happy.

MarkySpark responds:

You truly are a great man Nicholas!

[LB - Immiscibility]

Spirit of the Water

Swimming under the dark blue sea, a whale moves through the water in the distance. Seaweed dances in the tide as fish swarm around them. It is a different world, as things float in every direction. Up, down, left, right, there are creatures of strange origins walking through the ocean. The man with a black scuba suit silenty swims into the unkown, studying these exotic beings.

In the distance, a large canyon lies. The man peers over the hill, and looks down below to see thousands of sea creatures bathing in the seas beauty. Giant clams sleep on the surface. Colorful fish bathe in the tiny streams of sunlight that light up their world. Crabs stroll sideways, burrowing deep into their quiet homes. Giant towers of sand stretch towards the surface, covered with tiny animals. Jellyfish swarm into the waters, allowing its ripples to carry them forwards. These things are all known to many, but are seen by few. The scubadiver looks at these creatures in amazement. He has never seen anything like it before. Everything is so peaceful, so balanced. Everything seems to flow together. Its almost as if the sea itself is connecting with them, carrying them onwards.

(My favorite part is 1:53... thats the coolest transition I have heard in a while. Sorry I couldnt be all that original, but I could see a real spiritual oceanic feeling in this song. Beautiful work!)

Lublub194 responds:

I am honored to have such a beautiful review! Haha, thanks for it, really! I appreciate it when people can see stories in my work.

I didn't think the transition at 1:53 was all that cool, ahaha, but I'm glad you did!

Thanks a ton for the review and Fav :D!

[The Quiet Fields]

Innocence and Beauty. Small yet Large.

A large golden blimp soars above a field of wheat and trees. The diamond and ruby shine underneath the white clouds, casting a red and white hue over the field below. Its engine hums. Its pipes shoot quiet steam in all directions. It floats through the air, seemingly magical. At the front of the collosal gold lies a small, glass window. Inside this window lies a boy with blonde hair, smiling and laughing into the sky.

He twists and turnhs inside of the wheat fields, shooting this blimp across the sky. Although it may only be collosal to him, and perhaps to an ant as well, it is still his reality, and the wheat fields take him to another world.

MarkySpark responds:

Thank you Nick, I always look forward to your review stories.

[Imaginary Friend]

Innocence

A small boy plays enthusiastically with his toy cars, smashing their wooden bodies o the grassy ground beneath him. The fall colors relax over his face as he laughs and plays. The sun casts a golden glow over the trees as birds hum under the clouds.

The little boy stops playing for a moment, and looks over his shoulder. He begins talking, rolling, and laughing at seemingly nothing. In the boys perspective, he has met a new friend. He grabs him and tugs the air up a small hill, where he shows his new friend the valley below. They think it is beautiful, and want to go on an adventure. He gets his red wagon from his red, wooden shack and brings along some food and water. He puts his friend on the wagon, and they run excitedly through the plains.

They arrive at the hill, and the boy hops in the wagon with his friend. They count to three, and laugh and scream as the tiny wheels roll down the green bump. They put their arms in the air as the wind blows against their faces.

The sun begins lowering over the horizon, and the little boys mother asks for him to come inside. The boy beckons his new friend into his warm home, and they sleep.

MarkySpark responds:

You really understand my music Nick. You are gifted with insight and an understanding of music in general. Good Boy! :-)

[An Epic in 7/8]

Sky Fotress

A simple island, with one tree floats in the sky. A man, leaning on its bark, smokes a cigar while staring over the horizon, at a giant fortress that consumes the clouds. He hops on his eagle, and begins to fly towards it. The air whizzes by him. He concentrates purely on this structure and jumps, flying through the sir and landing on a small metal platform, from which he kicks a guard off the platform and steals his gun.

With gun in hand, he clutches against the metal wall. He waits. He listens. Footsteps are heard. He closes his eyes. Seconds later, a guard is taken aside, his neck broken, and his body thrown into the white abyss below. The man sneaks up marble stairs, through dark, electronic hallways, over air duct systems, and past every single bit of security.

He arrives at a chamber, holding one single man in a wheelchair, hooked up to some sort of breathing machine. The old man watches as this black figure approaches him, and his life is taken.

One hour later, it is realized that the emperor has been murdered, and one man sits against one tree on a small island.

TheBenjerman responds:

Thanks for reviewing again!

Nice story, especially since I pictured something completely different. It's always nice to get other people's views, but I can totally see where you are coming from.

^_^

[{dj-N} Theory of Everything]

Needs Remixing

Starts off with a bit of classic Nate piano, nice. Good, solid instruments mixed with a nice background. Then it switches off to a totally new thought process, which seems to still flow really nicely with the beginning. Its now a bit of a simple beat with synth in the background, nothing really spectacular but sounds really nice.

When "breakdown" came in the tone seemed to change again from a progressive beat to trance. This song seemed to kind of go everywhere, with changing beats, synths, and styles. That is its real flaw, but everything is played very well and sounds very nice. It just doesnt mix well together I think.

Perhaps you can try to switch each instrument / sound slower next time instead of suddenly changing. Try using simple fading techniques along with chord advancements, wave pads, and a bit of filters. Your a really good musician Nate, and I have heard way better songs from you than this. Everyone else seems to like it so I dont know, maybe im just over critical. :P

Congrats on top of the week and huge score!

dj-Nate responds:

Happy that you're giving me criticism, sad it isn't positive :'(

Haha jk, I really do appreciate the honest opinions and tips. I see what you're getting at, and will definitely be taken into consideration in my next project(s)

[Vintage Bike]

Ohhh yeeaahhh

He wakes up, ready to roll. Putting in slick shine lotion into his hair, he smiles at the mirror and glares at his sexy face. He puts the collars of his shirt straight up, puts on his glasses, and heads out the door. He throws the keys over his head and catches them with his other hand, unlocking his convertable in the process.

"Bitchin" he says in satisfaction. He drives down the road, as girls cheer on the sides. He clicks at them with his fingers and says, "Yeeeahh" with his hot, manly voice. All the girls go wild.

He arrives at his local job, at the strip bar, and hops out of the car without opening the door. "Allrriigghhtt," he says in order to maintain his personality. Inside, the doors spread wide open as a shadowy figured emerges into the bar. His head turned sideways, and his glasses lowered, he faces the crowd. He walks assured that he is the sexiest man to ever live, and begins taking off his clothes.

He hops onto the stage, and begins pulling his hips and arms in and out, to the beat of the music in the background. His dick flaps to its beat, and the girls fall head over heels for him.

SBB, the DJ in the background, bobs his head to the music as he plays it. A guy next to him asks, "He dog, whats the name of this song? " "This song? Its called Vintage Bike," he responds.

(((This is just the greatest loop ever xD)))

Grillpie responds:

this is the best thing I have read in my life

[-:YRX:- RobotL0ve RD2010]

Stars

There are stars everywhere. Green ones, red ones, and bright yellow ones. A man sits upon one of these magnificent beauties, tinkering at some sort of gadget. Its pipes and gears dig dep into the center of the star, its wires illuminating with a fierce white glow. The man presses a button and the star begins shaking. It rises in the air a bit, tilts back, front, then zooms off into the north of the field of wild stars.

He zooms across the particle paradise and makes his way for a white mist of planents, far away. The stars behind him think to a microscopic glow. Everything is silent, except for the irradiated illuminosity of the one star. He plows over comets as they shoot through the darkness. He spins in the air without any sort of care in the world he is in. His only focus is to simply touch one of the white orbs he sees ahead.

The white dust begins to grow larger, and soon form into tiny marbles. Finally, large planets can be seen. He spots a green one, and head for it. Jumping off the star, he spirals downwards onto the planets surface and lands on a large green tree. He looks up, to see the small star galaxy from which he came from. This is his new home now.

(((I liked the heavy happy techno synths you used here. Personally they arent my taste, but this was a fine listen. I enjoyed the combination of synths and pads you used.)))

YouriX responds:

Thanks for the story! You had in a creepy way a similiar idea as i did about this song when i thinked up a story for it! XD Pretty cool! And thanks for the small review also!