FatKidWitAJetPak's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Drug Story]

I need to re-record the 2nd verse.

Your beat was fine and creative mixed well with a nice sample of sounds and FXs. I have a lot more experience in voice acting right now and would love to re-record this. I had a few errors in my voice acting, but not to many except for at 2:00 when I start the second verse. I need to re-record that second verse and everything will be great. Mind if I do that?

DXsamurai responds:

Ya you can re-record the 2nd verse. you should make it longer. By the way do you need another copy?

[[Fiji_&_RNG] Infused]

Keep Going

That buildup contains some of the most orgasmic synths I have ever heard. You did a nice job choosing which ones to use. It almost seems to drift off into a completley different thing after 1:40, however, which really ends up distracting me from the originaly intended euphoria... in fact, it turns out that the "buildup" is actually the climax, when it shouldn't be in my opinion. You should use that nice, mellow combination of pads and "ah ah ah..." as a buildup, leading into a solo lead synth over it with an added beat. This seems more like a work in progress than a finished song, but so far it sounds great! :)

MrFijiWiji responds:

i do not choose synths patches... i create :).... and very good criticism i agree.... my climaxes need a hell of a lot work... this has been a problem lately :/

[TiGeR - Susurration]

Sick

The pad in the beginning was made really well. This is fruity loops right? This is fucking sick man. After 50 seconds it has a nice, chillax chaotic beat. Yeah, you can have something chill and chaotic at the same time. Nice use of 8-bit *8bit can be squarewave btw and trianglewave* after 1:40. This would be a great song for a flash game here on Newgrounds. I hope that it is recognized enough to be seen as that. I enjoy how mixed this song is, never repeating anything unnecessary while still maintaining that sweet drum n' bass feeling.

Very nicely done. The improvements that could be made are simply making that drum n bass a bit more epic, perhaps by building up to a lead louder than the squarewave while kicking it with an original, heavy duty beat. Think electric guitar over DNB. Should be sweet man. This song can really be "turned up" if you know what I mean.

TiGeR responds:

Thanks for the great review!

First of all, I'm not using FL - It's all about Reason 4 for me ;). Second of all, the squarewave sound-thingy does indeed sound very gameish, but I just got upset about that review earlier. "Very good song, here I give you 6" doesn't really convince me :/.

I'd love to see this on a Flash game. Actually, a guy already PMed me asking to use it in a game he's making so we'll see if it pops up in the FP sooner or later ^^!

And well, not entirely sure how to epicify* (newly invented word lol) the song. There's two different leads before the breakdown, wouldn't a third be a little too much? I definetly see what you mean but I'm not sure myself to be honest :S. I thought the song was borderline too long already xD, I even decide to remove 40 seconds or so before uploading the song (yea it originally was over 5 min :P). But still, I think I understand what you mean and I'll take it into consideration for the next song I make (which isn't gonna be in a near future since I have to take a break cuz of school :/)

Anywho, thanks a lot for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the song!

~TiGeR

[Keep on Rolling]

Scooby Doo lmao.

I loved the recording of Shaggy talking in the beginning. The lyrics are really overdone because it is all about being a rapper and making music on how you want to make it. This has been done so many times its ridiculous, however this time it was done well. Just keep rolling and do your own thing. If someone has something to say about it, ask them to say it to your face because you shouldnt give a fuck. Do want you want to do and don't let society hold you down about it. If you want to be a stripper, hell be a stripper.

Anyway, the beat mixed with the trombone and piano was a real nice mix. The rapping was very clear and understandable, showing that you are very experienced. I might even want you to help me make this quirky rap I wrote about a guy bombing a building... straight up. Lol.

Keep it up bro. Pants on the ground. Best line ever. Congrats on top of the week.

glitchs2d responds:

Thanks I usually do songs about depression and stuff you know emo rap but I had to kind of switch it around with the beat haha a guy bombing a building I could do that I made a song about a guy fighting the devil so thats nothing

[-( Wut )-]

Soften it up a bit.

The thing I have a problem with is that it is a bit to distorted, and remains that way. I think that in order to enjoy an experimental, distorted song, you must remember to vary between soft and hard. If it remains hard throughout the entire song, it starts tog et annoying and to harsh on the ears. Try applying filters that soften up the harshness a bit, and filters it to where it goes from soft to hard, hard to soft, soft to hard e.t..c

Then again, experimental can really go everywhere. I could see this being used in a flash, and that is really the purpose for these sort of songs. It loops very well, I didnt even realized it had looped. Very odd song, I like that.

Tykwa responds:

I wanted harsh.

Yay

[Kazmo - Visionary [NG Cut]]

Technical Review Stuff

I immediately thought of your heart in a headlock remix when i heard the first synth come in. It has a very similar feel to it. I also thoroughly enjoy the fact that you render it out at 224KBS. Im gonna DJ at a party on Halloween and will totally use some of your music for it. I can take some videos if ur interested.

Anyway, I thought it started out kind of slow. I didn't really feel a sense of euphoria until around 2:27. Personally I thought you should have started it out with that trancy pad and THEN lead off into the beat that you original put in the beginning of the song. The mix at 3:27 was kind of strange. I thought you should have chosen a different synth that wasnt a tad off tune. Dont get me wrong, I love off tune synths, but the way this song is... an off tune synth doesnt work to well.

There was some really nice buildup in here, but I couldn't really FEEL anything after the buildups. It seems like the euphoric feeling just vanishes after the trance pad part. Everything you use really sounds "quirky".

It was mixed really well, with great quality, but not really played out as good as it could have been. Keep on playing man, your always improving. This seemed like more of a huge experiment than anything.

Kazmo responds:

Hey FatKid, I appreciate the technical review.

Lol it's actually 192kbps, forgot to update that part, since I made it slightly longer I had to cut down the quality a tad again.

Just a reminder, it's called an NG Cut, so it's not going to follow the full structure that I normally do.

I feel that if the lead wasn't a bit off-tune, it wouldn't be pleasant to the ears, since a plain sine wave isn't really the nicest thing to listen to (as a reference).

I don't quite understand the term "quirky" lol.

In the end it all comes down to preference. Thanks again :3

[Graceful]

Passion

The boy sits in the cool arms of a shadow, cast upon the ground by a large oak tree. He gazes into the valley in front of him, filled with nature and life that calls out his name. He needs inspiration. He needs something to feel passion for. He looks upon the beauty of earth, and think to himself as he stares onto the blank sheet of paper in his hands. He begins to write. The pen in his hand crafts the thoughts from his heads into a wonderful composition of words. He stops. He thinks. He looks up again, and reaches his heart out into the world around him.

He soars over the trickling rivers. The warm colors of turning trees wash over his body. He reaches his arms outwards, and breaths in the wonderful harmony of the valley. Boards feed their young ones as foxes scatter into bushes and rush around hedges. Deer lay peacefully inside their homes, curling next to their loved ones. A centipede burrows through the dirt and sleeps inside of its hole. Clouds up expand and dissolve in the wonderful beams of light that carry them. The wind rushes over his face as he hold these things inside his arms. He writes word after word until the entire page is full with letters. He understands now. He feels at peace. Satisfied with his work, he gathers his notebook, takes one last look at the earth, and heads back to his quiet home.

Back in his wooden cabin, there is an old woman in a bed, dying of age. She smiles as he walks up, handing her a small piece of paper. "Sit down," she says in a raspy voice. He pulls up an old chair, and sits next to the woman, holding her hand as she reads. After a few moments, a smile forms itself across her battered face. She looks into his eyes as he does to her, and they kiss. She looks up towards the ceiling, and takes one last graceful breath. The man squeezes her hand, and cries as the sheet of paper follows his tears to the floor below. Written upon its surface lies the words, "I Love You" and nothing else.

BatesyBates responds:

Thanks for writing this, what an interesting read! :D

[Lost In Thought...]

I Dont Want To Be Here

As I walk down the darkened road, past the tiny streaks of light that paint its dull walls, I look up into the stars and gaze upon them. The twinkling balls of white cluster together, forming a never ending universe of bewilderment and chaos. They sit so still in the quiet sky, yet far away on a distant world they may not be there. Their forms travel across the universe, past all of its wonder, and look into my eyes. They smile at me and caress my body. I see them as they see me, and for an instant I am one with the stars.

I fly off ahead, into the milky shadows. They carry me into their arms, and I watch as the earth below me gets smaller and smaller until it is but a marble in the abyss of the unknown. Now I float in a never ending picture of twisting light and forms that piece together everything that once was and wont be. They sit, undiscovered, unlooked upon by any eye, untouched by any soul, forgotten and left behind in the dust of the big bang. I reach my hand out and try to hold them against my weak body, but can not. I am trapped here, inside these bars, looking out upon the stars that confuse my spirits.

I close my eyes and feel the life drain from my body. Tears fell to the ground below and land onto the reality that holds me. The black road that I stand upon carries my tear, and engulfs it into nothingness. I look into the windows of my home, and walk inside to sleep and dream of the universe.

(((This song brought me to tears. I feel so depressed right now, lost in thought. I do not know how to express myself anymore than I already have, but know that this piece is truly wonderful. I always have wondered outside, attempting to get away from reality. My parents would send me to go walk the dog, and I would take the time to think about life while looking into the stars. I could get pretty close to them, but then I would immediately realize the thought of flying towards them was simply impossible. I feel love for this song... I really do. Thank you for making it.)))

BatesyBates responds:

Wow, thanks for this amazing review!

[-ganon95- Summer's here]

Daytime Party!

Its Friday night and it's time to party. The teenagers jump inside of their bright red convertible and head towards the booming town. Bass fills the air as everyone dances to the bitter sweat beat of Spring Break. Shops welcome everyone in for some nice, tasty ice-cream. Stands on the sidelines try and sell items such as hats and sunglasses. Here on the beach, its time to party. Everyone waits for night to fall, and for Spring Break to finally really begin.

(((More like spring break if you ask me. It reminded me of people dancing and partying, getting drunk, wearing bikinis, smoking some pot, dancing to techno, grooving to the beat, and just participating in the pure chaos of Spring Break. The song near the middle seemed to get a little boring, mainly because you were using an upbeat tune that normally would have a lot of things going on in the background... with not much going on at all. There were a few SFXs here and there but for the most part it seemed a bit to mellow with to dancy of a beat and synth mixture. Next time, try adding a lot more elements to the background. Try experimenting a bit with dubstep, filter in a nice long synth buildup, and continue off with a nice mixture of SFX. You seem to have the SFX part of it down though.)))

ganon95 responds:

heheh thanks, yes i guess it could remind you of spring a bit, but it makes me think of summer more

[Relaxation Loop [SMD]]

Breath

Sitting upon a white cloud, transcending along the clear blue skies, a man dangles his legs into the world below. White puffs of smoke trail into the air as he take a deep breath of his cigarette. The breeze feels nice up here. Everything feel so chill. He smiles and relaxes underneath the perfect warmth of the sun combined with the smooth touch of the wind. The cloud floats past everything down below. He watched the still, resting houses below. He watches the chill movement of the trees. He feels relaxed.

(((If you were trying to give a sense of relaxation... you really did the trick here! Its such a simple, yet perfect loop. Great guitar playing, excellent chords, and perfect choice of instruments. It has looped now at least 7 times and I am not tired of it yet.)))

SmdSkata responds:

Thanks man.

This song started off as a concept when I was falling asleep playing guitar next to the computer at midnight. Found a chord progression I loved, and built off it and within two hours I captured that tired/accomplished sense I had quickly. I uploaded it at 2am and passed the hell out.

The story you gave makes me think deeper in meaning of the song. I feel that maybe the man passed on from earth, but takes stop atop a cloud and looks down to see all that he has accomplished.

Thanks again bud.